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英文協助批改報告

20 / 28

落點區間 20-24

翻譯

5 / 8

共 2 題

作文

15 / 20

225 words · band 15-18

下一步最該改進

這次翻譯得分率 63%,是兩項中較低的,建議優先加強。

  • •介系詞搭配不穩定,如 demand for。
  • •名詞單複數與主詞動詞一致需加強,如 this kind of battery is。
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  • 中譯英
  • 英文作文
  • 寫作優化
翻譯

一、中譯英

這裡整理每題翻譯的得分與修改建議。

翻譯題 1

3 / 4

題目:近年來,越來越多學生習慣一邊讀書一邊看手機訊息。

修正文本

In recent years, more students more and more students have been become used to checking their phone messages while studying.

建議版本:In recent years, more and more students have become used to checking their phone messages while studying.

-0.5

數量表達不完整

-0.5

句型結構(be used to 較偏靜態描述)

參考答案

In recent years, more and more students have become used to checking their phone messages while studying.

翻譯題 2

2 / 4

題目:雖然手機能幫助我們快速取得資訊,但過度依賴它可能會降低我們思考的能力。

修正文本

Though cell phones can help us get information quickly, overly rely relying too much on them probably may probably lower our ability to think focusly.

建議版本:Though cell phones can help us get information quickly, relying too much on them may lower our ability to think.

-1

動詞與副詞搭配錯誤

-0.5

拼字錯誤

參考答案

Though cell phones can help us get information quickly, relying too much on them may lower our ability to think.

常見問題

  • 介系詞搭配不穩定,如 demand for。
  • 名詞單複數與主詞動詞一致需加強,如 this kind of battery is。

速練建議

  • 練習「越來越多」= more and more 的數量表達。
  • 練習 be used to / become used to 的差異。
作文

二、英文作文

這裡整理作文評語、分項表現與修改建議;字數建議約為 120 字。

作文題目

提示:請根據下列圖片情境,寫一篇英文作文。第一段描述圖片中的情境;第二段說明這個小改變可能帶來的影響,並提出你的看法。

學生答案

In the picture, a teacher stands at the front of a highschool classroom and asks students to hand out their cell phones to the box before class begins. At first, some students seem hesitant and uncomfortable, but later they enjoy chatting with close friends in real life instead of texting messages.

作文分數

15 / 20

字數

225

等級

15-18

分項分數

內容

4 / 5

組織

4 / 5

文法

3 / 5

字彙拼寫

4 / 5

錯誤分布

拼字

2

文法

3

字彙

2

標點

1

作文分析

這篇作文的重點回饋

幫你整理這篇作文寫得好的地方、還能加強的重點,以及可以直接參考的修改建議。

✓ 你這次表現好的地方

  • 段落結構清楚,先描述情境再提出看法。
  • 能使用對比句型表達學生前後的轉變。

✗ 這次可以再進步的地方

  • 部分字彙搭配不自然,如 beloved infrastructure。
  • 少數拼字與複合名詞錯誤。

💡 幫你整理好的修改建議

  • 多累積描述情境的常用搭配詞。
  • 完成後朗讀一次,檢查拼字與單複數。
修正文本

作文修正

原文與修正並列:紅色刪除線為原文錯誤,綠色為修正後版本。

內容 4/5組織 4/5文法 3/5字彙拼寫 4/5

In the picture, a teacher stands at the front of a highschool high school classroom and asks students to hand out put their cell phones to in the box before class begins. At first, some students seem hesitant and uncomfortable, but later they enjoy chatting with close friends in real life instead of texting messages.

寫作優化

寫作優化建議

這裡整理了可以調整的地方,幫你把句子寫得更順、更自然。

類別原文修正說明
拼字highschoolhigh school複合名詞應分開寫。
字彙hand out their cell phones to the boxput their cell phones in the boxhand out 表示「分發」;此處應為交出手機。
拼字eayilyeasily拼字錯誤。
拼字

highschool

high school

複合名詞應分開寫。

字彙

hand out their cell phones to the box

put their cell phones in the box

hand out 表示「分發」;此處應為交出手機。

拼字

eayily

easily

拼字錯誤。

字彙補充

實用字彙與轉承詞

這裡整理了本次作文主題的實用字彙與建議使用的轉承詞。

敘事承轉詞:

At first(起初)Later(後來)Instead of(而不是)

描述情境的實用字彙:

  • implement a policy(推行政策)
  • social interaction(社交互動)
  • focus on(專注於)
高分示範

高分範文

Before class in a high school classroom, a teacher stands beside a box labeled "Phone Parking Lot" and asks students to place their phones inside. Some students in line look uneasy, while others keep glancing at their screens as if they are not ready to let go. Once class begins, however, students can concentrate better because they are no longer distracted by constant notifications. Instead of texting, they start talking to the classmates sitting next to them, and the room feels more connected than before.

亮點拆解

畫面描寫更聚焦

高分版本先把圖片中的人、地、動作寫清楚,讓讀者一開始就看見場景,而不是只看到抽象評論。

先交代場景與核心動作

● 用一句話完整框住畫面

範文片段:"Before class in a high school classroom, a teacher stands beside a box labeled 'Phone Parking Lot' and asks students to place their phones inside." 為什麼有效:這句同時交代了時間、地點、人物、物件與動作,完全對應圖片與題目。學生可模仿寫法:Before class in..., a teacher/students... and asks... to...

● 把盒子的資訊自然放進句子

範文片段:"a box labeled 'Phone Parking Lot'" 為什麼有效:不是單獨硬塞名詞,而是用 labeled 這個過去分詞把圖片細節自然嵌入句子。學生可模仿寫法:a sign reading..., a box labeled..., a poster saying...

描寫學生的初始反應

● 用可視化動作呈現不自在

範文片段:"Some students in line look uneasy, while others keep glancing at their screens as if they are not ready to let go." 為什麼有效:不是只說 students felt uncomfortable,而是用 look uneasy、keep glancing at their screens 讓情緒變得可見。學生可模仿寫法:Some students look..., while others keep V-ing...

分析段落更有層次

高分作文不只說『有幫助』,而是把影響拆成學習與人際兩條線,並用因果順序展開。

先寫學習上的改變

● 用 because 補足原因

範文片段:"Students can concentrate better because they are no longer distracted by constant notifications." 為什麼有效:用 because 把『更專心』的原因講清楚,論點更有說服力。學生可模仿寫法:... can ... better because they are no longer ...

再寫人際上的改變

● 用對比凸顯轉變

範文片段:"Instead of texting, they start talking to the classmates sitting next to them." 為什麼有效:用 Instead of A, they B 的對比,凸顯小改變帶來的人際互動。學生可模仿寫法:Instead of V-ing, they start V-ing...